So far in the book "When I Was a Soldier":
we meet a young lady named Valérie Zenatti from Nice, France along with her to friends and her two Russian best friends Yulia and Rahel, they all live in Beersheva, israel in the desert. They have finally turned or are about to turn 18 years old and must take the trials of the baccalauréat. But for Val it doesn't matter because shes going to be enlisted into the army. It's a right of passage into adulthood but shes not exactly looking forward to it. finally the day comes were she must leave, after a brief but heart filled goodbye to everyone she loves she is called onto the bust. Once on the bus she is seated by another girl Eynat who she quickly becomes friends with. after they arrive at the base they are placed into regiments and companys. they are given their dog tags with and their numbers. they are introduced to their corprals and she soon learns that this life is going to be one of discipline and hardship.
in a paragraph that i have choosen she writes it from her point of view often commenting on things and telling what happens one after another. it flows as if someone was telling the story to you.
Watch some basic surface errors, like capitalizing the first words of each sentence. Otherwise, your synopsis looks good. Your analysis of the syntax is lacking and vague. Remember, you need textual evidence to support your assertions, like the one you made in your last sentence.
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